EWIS 文章修改样本

EWIS自成立以来已经帮助顾客修改了不少的文章。在今后的日子里，我们将会陆续将一些修改样本发布到网站上，供大家参考。今天的顾客样本是一篇Reading summary，我们来看看吧。

原文：

After seeing this article, which talks about the love, I feel like love is really simple because it is easy to tell and show. As I saw, Love is you really want to care, to worry and to pressure about. Even some one will say love is hot, excited, however, I think a cup of coffee, and some little conversation could still show how you love someone. I could said my mom love my father really much, because every time when he came back to home, my mom will cook for him, and my father will bring some little gift when he went to other country. Although they married for several years, the love between them still not decrease.

修改后：

After reading this article about love, I realize how simple love can be. I agree with the author that loving someone is all about caring, giving and understanding. Even though some people might say that love should be hot and exciting, I think a simple cup of coffee and daily conversations can still show how much you love someone. My parents are a good example. Every time when my father comes back home from work, my mother will cook for him; and whenever my father goes on business trips, he would always bring home nice little gifts for my mother. Although they have been married for over 20 years, the love between them has not decreased. I believe it is the small details where they show their care towards each other that make their marriage happy and long-lasting.

从样本可见，EWIS的修改不仅仅是将原文的很多语法和词汇错误纠正了，更是将文章加以润色，使整篇文章通顺不少，而且内容上也完整了许多。